Lady Sydney

Very nice, Vernon. It suits the story very well!! I like how you've tied Jared's past in with the story. Nice touch! ^_^ Once again, as I say usually, there ...

OM freaking G!!! I can't believe I've never noticed this before! I love it! You did a very nice job on capturing the feelings that go one through a teenager's, ...

Well...you DID say that this was your first time. Mkay. Where to begin? Where to begin? Um... ok. I'll start with saying that you should probably work on your structure. ...

I love your poem, Tigger Tigg, and I'm not just saying that because I'm your girlfriend. I mean that honestly. My only suggestion to you would be, as DD told ...

was...different. I liked it and all, but I didn't really FEEL it. You know? Also, you also have quite a few spelling, punctuation, and grammar errors. My suggestion: Again, proofread ...

Mkay. This actually DOES a have a good backround, plot, idea, WHATEVER you wanna call it. The only thing I would suggest is that you watch your punctuation and spelling ...

Hey there, you. I've read your story, as you know, but I wanted to comment to you as well. Like I've told you, your story is really good. I like ...

Really nice poem you have here, Clouds! :D I like your keen eye for description. Although there was maybe one or two misplaced puntuation (sp?) marks, this was great. I ...

Oh wowee! That was really good! I can't tell you HOW many times I have been trying to develop my story into something like this! Not ideawise, but your flow ...

OMG!!! Your story is GENIUS!!! I loved every bit of it. Your description is polished to perfection, and you kept me very entertained from beginning to end. Very well done!!! ...